Iris/ Glory Box/ Ghetto Heaven

Iris

I’d step away from my future to feel you
Because I know that you’ll be there to embrace
You’re my Heaven on Earth and above
I don’t want to die in this moment

All my senses are of yours in this instance
And all I need to survive is your well being
One of these days our lives shall end
Tonight please stay beside me

Shielding myself from judgmental eyes
No one understands the being of my life
Things are made to be of imperfection
See me through the clouds of my storm

Don’t try to sympathize when you have no sympathy for me
There can never be blatant honesty in your empathy
Everything is surreal to good to be true
You need the obvious to be stated just to remind you of reality

Shielding myself from judgmental eyes
No one understands the being of my life
Things are made to be of imperfection
See me through the clouds of my storm

Shielding myself from judgmental eyes
No one understands the being of my life
Things are made to be of imperfection
See me through the clouds of my storm

Shielding myself from judgmental eyes
No one understands the being of my life
Things are made to be of imperfection
See me through the clouds of my storm

See me through the clouds of my storm
See me through the clouds of my storm
See me through the clouds of my storm

Even though the lyrics were changed the meaning remained the same throughout the entire piece. In the original piece the tone is very romantic like. It give off the feeling that this person really needs their significant other in their life. In my piece, it is more focused about becoming one, and possibly losing yourself while loving the other person.

Glory Box

Drone with childhood actions
I’m ready to stop my grownup games
I’m ready to fall in love
The other women can flirt all day
I’ve been playing the tease long enough

I need..

I demand a reason to give you my heart
I need a reason to stop being a girl
I just want to grow up

From now on I’m free to be a woman
Looking at myself in a new light
In my new mindset
Anything is possible to achieve
Watch me make the unimaginable possible

I demand a reason to give you my heart
I need a reason to stop being a girl
I just want to grow up

Remain the man that my woman needs
When things get hard look at what I’ve achieved
Show compassion of your feminine side
It’s ok to shed your emotions

I demand a reason to give you my heart
I need a reason to stop being a girl
I just want to grow up

This is a new chapter in my permanent life

Watch me make the unimaginable possible

Although the sentences are changed, the meaning remains the same. In the original piece it is more of a questioning of becoming a woman. In my version of the song it is more demanding. She wants to become a woman, and she wants to grow up, and she won’t settle for less.

Ghetto Heaven

Looking for my diamond in the rough through the rough
Young girl catching my eye with they tender body's
Diverting my attention away from the path of forever terminology
I got my soul on salvation
I want my people to escape the rags of poor
Mother of my child is now a ghost
No worries sweet child I’m your guardian angel
Staying in tune with the vibes of nature
The Lord is always guarding us
Children look up to a generation for role models
Never mistake the wisdom of a man that’s lost his way
Even though tragedy strikes our nation can get worse
I walk through life with God forever there to save me
I feel like I just need to kill these feelings
I wasn’t put on this Earth to kill
I want people to remember my name with pride
I want to be greater than the material things
He found his diamond in the rough through within him and God

Sweetness of the rough
Committed to the sweetness of the rough
Sweetness of the rough
Committed to the sweetness of the rough
Ghetto…

Happiness doesn’t derive from the accompany of love
Women be dependant on your own don’t rely on a man
I empathize with you that men can be your rock
Taking care of your material things, and treating you as such
I remember a friend who didn’t know about love
His man wasn’t able to love her because the problem derived within himself
He loved her from a distance and claimed that the love was felt
You cannot find true love until you find yourself
Mistakes are just solutions that teach you to become a better person
Do not turn from love because of the wrongs of one man
To get the love a woman needs, you must be willing to wait
At this point of time your patience shall be rewarded
When going through hard times its best to have people around you
Sweet angel he’s now a ghost, but I don’t mind losing your father you’re worth more
You have more value than anything priceless
To be the great person you have become he had to leave…let him go
I’m not ignorant to the fact that he’s left us alone without his love
Find your peace within yourself and God

My heart is with my baby
As my baby’s heart is with me
I’ lonely in the peace I have found in myself
In an instant I need my time of sweet roughness
Time for my peace of sweet roughness
Peace of roughness, peace of roughness
I’m in need of peace
I’m ready for my place of peace, ohhhhhh….

The words I’m speaking our bigger than my being
Music is what makes my soul happy
Having to deal with wanna bee’s and the girls with no clue
There are times in my life that are hard to get through
Choosing words to influence people around the world
I love doing something of my passion to support my family
Remaining to take care of your brothers who are in trouble
Reminding everyone of the messages our ancestors wanted to influence us
It’s hard to live up to the wisdom of our ancestors
I recognized how I wanted to build my success… the honest way
I didn’t want to sell out, because music is my art
I hope to didn’t take the easy way out, and hoped for the best
No matter from what walk of life we all have to go through it
Going through the hard times in life without music is unfathomable
It’s like trying to rely on multiple people
Find your place of peace in this music and God
Find your place of peace and God
Find your place of peace and God

Both the original, and my version resemble each other greatly, however in my version it is more explanatory. In the original versions, things are said more for the sake of the flow, and not for the sense of comprehension. In my piece the tone is set for a change to arise. It’s a problem solution type of story line, problems are stated with the repetitive solution that you must find piece within yourself.

*Yea this wan't fun* Comparison Analysis

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Private Businesses Shed 250,000 Jobs in November
Federal Report Finds Economic Activity Fell in Most Every Industry
By Neil Irwin and Howard SchneiderWashington Post Staff Writers Wednesday, December 3, 2008; 2:47 PM

Business conditions weakened across the United States and in almost every industry in recent weeks, according to a Federal Reserve report released today. And a pair of other reports indicated that private employers shed jobs at an accelerating rate and the nation's service sector contracted sharply in November.
Together, the reports are strong evidence that the recession is deepening as winter approaches. Stocks were up moderately in early afternoon trading, with the Dow Jones industrial average up less than one percent, or 39 points.
The Fed's "beige book," a compilation of anecdotal reports from businesses across the nation published roughly every six weeks, found that "overall economic activity weakened across all Federal Reserve districts since the last report."
The report amounted to a catalogue of misery across almost all sectors of the economy. Consumer spending weakened almost across the board, especially for vehicles. Tourism activity was "relatively slow." Manufacturing "declined noticeably" since the Fed's last report. Services business "generally contracted in most districts."
Part of the problem was that lenders have continued to restrict credit. "Credit standards rose across the nation," the beige book said, "with several districts noting increases in loan delinquencies and defaults, especially in the real estate sector."
One bright spot is that price pressures have been dropping, especially for energy, food, and raw materials. The same is true of retail prices. "A number of district reports mentioned that retailers were widely discounting prices in anticipation of a slow holiday sales season," the document said.
In its monthly employment report, payroll processors estimated that private businesses shed 250,000 jobs in November on a seasonally adjusted basis. It was the biggest drop in seven years and "offers evidence that the labor market continues to weaken," ADP said in its monthly payroll survey.
Based on data from nearly 400,000 companies, the report showed employment declines across the board as large, medium and small companies all shed jobs, and employment contracted in all sectors of the economy.
The ADP report sets the stage for the government's next monthly jobs report, due out Friday. Analysts expect that report to show another spike in unemployment and job losses that may approach 300,000.
The numbers from the ADP report are "terrible," wrote Ian Shepherdson, chief U.S. economist with the High Frequency Economics consulting firm, in an analysis of the employment numbers.
With payrolls deteriorating in both the manufacturing and service sectors "there is nowhere to hide," he said.
A separate study by the Institute of Supply Management showed that economic activity in the service sector fell to the lowest level since its index for the sector was first reported more than a decade ago. The ISM surveys businesses for information on hiring, new orders and other data that are formed into an overall index. A reading greater than 50 indicates a sector is expanding. The reading for November was 37.3, compared to 44.4 in October.
Even usually positive news -- a rise in worker productivity -- took on a dark hue. The value of hourly worker output increased by 1.3 percent from July through September, a larger increase than originally estimated, according to the Bureau of Labor Statistics. But that upward revision came only because employers cut back workers hours, leaving fewer employees to produce goods and services.

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